In order to revise my paper for the better, I plan to expand certain ideas and interject stronger opinions into it. Ultimately, my goal is to smooth out the rough edges of my paper and to produce a more interesting paper with a clearer argument. Most importantly, I need to put forth a stronger personal opinion on art from my own perspective. This is tough, because I wholeheartedly agree with Schiller’s ideas of the sense and form drives. I also will need to find an effective way to incorporate more modes of communication into my paper, such as music and nature photography. I need to organize my thoughts more clearly to do this correctly. My biggest challenge will be incorporating my own opinion into it in a distinct and strong way. This is hard because personally, I see beauty in almost everything, making a narrow selection challenging for me to decide on or talk about. It’s also hard because my opinions on what makes things beautiful are very neatly in line with Schiller’s, seeing as I’ve always strongly believed in a dichotomy of two opposite-oriented aspects of human nature based on logic and emotion overlapping to create products greater than the sum of their parts. This is a very specific belief, but one that I have held for quite some time. (My second paper went into detail about my ideas on the two sides of humanity) and Schiller’s ideas line up extremely neatly with my core belief about human nature. If I can’t find a way to make a distinct opinion, I’ll just write a paragraph or so explaining this as I just have; that I have always believed in essentially what Schiller articulates.