1.  My primary goal is to improve the structure of my essay, and to build more claims off of my own ideas and perspective, rather than off of the ideas of Rhys Southan or Titus Kaphar. Many comments I received from revision suggested putting more of my own thoughts and ideas into the claims of the essay.
  2. I plan to distinguish my own ideas from those of Southan and Kaphar. I will reflect on my thoughts on the subject, and find ways to add more of a personal touch to the claims I make. I will re-read my paper, and focus on how my ideas are conveyed. I will also examine how some of my paragraphs are structured, so that I can revise them to more clearly convey my message to the reader.
  3. The biggest challenge will be to separate my own view on the subject of art from the views that Kaphar and Southan hold. This is because I hold very similar views to the two of them in regards to the importance of art. While writing the free draft, I felt as if most of the claims I made were of my own perspective, only to be told during peer review that most people felt like I should put more of my own thoughts into the paper. I need to find new angles to present my own claims so that it’s more clear when I share my own thoughts rather than explain the views of others. It was apparently difficult for nearly all of my reviewers to distinguish my views from the views of Southan and Kaphar, and this is where the challenge is for me.
  4. If this challenge proves to be too difficult, I can always find a 3rd party for help. Oftentimes, there is a simple solution just outside of my mind’s reach, and simply asking another person how to solve a challenge can reveal possibilities that I never thought of.  By showing a peer or roommate my article and explaining my dilemma, odds are they can provide some good insight into how I might resolve the challenge.